After viewing everyones feedback aqnd ideas for their final projects, I have decidedto write an essay that incorporates another essay and blog post to discuss Ocean as a language and history, unique in its relationship with the human race. I plan on using the works of Mentz, Roonan, and African Mermaids for use of close reading and analysis. I will have a main question on how the human relationship with the Ocean has evolved over time and how the Ocean itself is a recognized Nation and State, with individual identity and history.
Thesis as of now:
Through the works of Rooda, Mentz, and African Mermaids, exposes modern humans to the ideology of Ocean as an identity and history. Humans are exposed to the ocean as the bases for modern human language and the relationship between all humans across the seas. In our exposure, we connect back to our Oceanic and mythical roots that set the foundation for the modern human race.
Great ideas here! I think you’re strongest articulation of an argument is actually not in the section labeled thesis, but here: “human relationship with the Ocean has evolved over time and how the Ocean itself is a recognized Nation and State, with individual identity and history.” I think you want to say that the ocean is an entity and concept that is evolved over time in relationship to nations and states; is that right? If so, I would get rid of the mention of African mermaids and instead focus on Gillis and other Blue Humanities texts. The Walcott poem might serve you better. Also, I hope that your thesis will explain what you mean by “ideology of Ocean as an identity and history”; or, should you go with the line that I’m proposing here, you can cut that altogether.