For my final project, I want to expand on my post about Derek Walcott’s poem about the sea’s history, and how much hold water has on human history. The original focus of my post was how it pushes the human need to utilize violence and imperialism as a land marker for human record. The sea’s ability to act as a mass that holds memory is expanded on within his poem, as well as many other works throughout our readings.
I want to expand on how the sea keeping so many of humanity’s secrets makes it something so integral to society; nature surrounds us and keep track of everything we do and do not see. Without it, we have no complete and unbiased book on what truly occurred to us, so it requires recognition, and thereby protection, from us to keep its stability possible. By tying in some of the themes of Sirenomelia and The Deep as other credited resources, it proves how versatile the message remains through the same story, told in different ways.
There are good ideas here. I’d like to see you be clear about this: “By tying in some of the themes of Sirenomelia and The Deep as other credited resources.” What are the specific themes? This is the WHAT that you need to explore and develop from; be as specific as possible and build from this. Another place to dive in and clarify: “the sea keeping so many of humanity’s secrets makes it something so integral to society”. In other words, what you have here is still rather general. So let’s get more specific about WHAT you want to look at and examine… then, what you want to say about it… then WHY. Keep going to get more specific!